Age rating: 15
MY SCRIPT:
Scene opens by panning around a field at a long shot, showing the forest in the distance. A person can be seen stood in the middle, staring at the forest. Jump shot to a close up of the person with a confused expression, looking around frantically. They are dressed entirely in black, and look down at their clothes. The shot changes to an extreme close up of the person's hand picking at their clothes, as if they are confused as to why they are dressed like that. The shot then changes to a mid-shot from behind the girl as she starts to walk towards the forest.
Once in the forest, the pace of the cuts between clips begins to speed up. We also hear the heavy panting of the girl over the top of the clip to add dramatic effect. At first, it starts at a steady pace. It begins with showing the girl looking around the forest, then switching to a shot of three figures dressed in black walking through the forest - their hair is covering their faces. As it switches back to the girl, it is a close up of her feet as she walks, snapping twigs along the way. It again quickly cuts away to a clip of the three figures, who quickly stop in their tracks and look sharply to their left, before turning that way and continuing to walk.
This is when the shot cuts begin to speed up. The shots include different angles of the characters walking and clips such as burning matches, china dolls and water dripping from a leaf on a tree (this will connote sadness and danger). These shots will also include the names of the actors and crew involved carved into the trees or written on burnt paper on the floor. When the jump shots finish, it will cut to a close up of the first girl as her expression turns from confusion to fear and she starts to scream. The sound of the heartbeat stops and the screen cuts to black. There will then be a static sound over the black screen. The title of the movie will then fade into the black screen.
MARY'S SCRIPT:
No sound, just a forest, girls appear in the shot. Opens on a wide shot of 4 girls standing in a woods (staggered) heads towards the floor. All of them are dressed in black, no expression on their faces. A flash appears and a jump shot change occurs; to a close up of all the girls faces, focusing on different parts of their face (eyes or lips) Jump shot again; the girls are ripping a doll apart, running through the woods. The girls move
in sync with each other, in time with the eerie music which plays in the background throughout the duration of the opening titles.
In the next shot the girls can be seen silently screaming and chanting, the next jump shot is of a match being striked and thrown to the ground. Whilst the action is going on jump shots will be used to show close ups of the girls faces and then will return back to the action.
The opening credits will be written across the trees and outfits of the girls. They will fly across the screen appear for a second and then disappear.
ZOE'S SCRIPT:
Camera pans around a empty forest. All is quiet, peaceful and eerie.
Then the sound of crunching leaves can be heard, and they get louder and louder, Camera pans to a extreme close up of feet walking one behind the other slowly.
The camera then does an over the shoulder shot of one of the girls, in the background there are stickmen hanging from different trees, the camera then does a close up of one of the stickmen before flashing away to the four girls walking one behind the other still.
The girls are all dressed in Black and show no emotion on their faces, the camera does a close up on a few of the girls faces, it's almost as if they are shadows within the forest. They continue to walk until they reach a clearing in the woods, during this the camera uses shot cuts of the girls faces, feet, hands as they walk. The leading girl stops and the others follow. The camera does a mid shot.
In the middle of a clearing stands a lone cauldron, the camera primarily focuses on the cauldron for a few seconds before panning as the four girls surround the cauldron and each slowly reaches for each others hands. The camera zooms into a 180 degree shot, showing each girl from behind as they hold hands, the camera then shoots to the front of the girls, showing no emotion on their faces again. They each have their heads bowed and looking at the floor.
The camera the goes to a longshot and in the distance there is the chiming of a church bell.
The Camera then pans to a extreme close up of one of the girls who reaches into her pocket and produces a rag doll covered in needles and with a small lock of real hair tied to the top of the doll. Another girl produces a knife, the camera does a mid shot to show the full extent of the girls body holding the knife. The third girl withdraws a box of matches and the final girl, the one who was leading produces nothing. The camera pans away slowly as the four girls drop hands and line up in front of the cauldron.
The girl holding the matches steps forward and slowly pushes the match box open. The camera slowly pans into an extreme close up of the girls hand and the match box. In the match box is a single black match. The girl then reaches into the box and plucks out the match and drops it into the cauldron unlit and steps back into line. The camera then pans onto the next girl with the knife, who slowly steps forward. The camera goes to mid shot as the girl holds her left hand over the cauldron and places the knife over the top, quickly the girl makes a fist around the knife before using her right hand to move the knife shown the skin of her hand. The camera captures blood dripping of the girls hand into the cauldron. She then moves back and the third girl with the rag doll steps forward. She smirks and quickly rips the head of the doll off and chucks then into the cauldron .The camera pans to a longshot during this to show capture of the girls during this part. The girls then create a circle again and the fourth girl steps forward towards the cauldron. She looks at the other three girls and laughs. It's a dark laugh. The camera then speeds up and creates a mid shot of the girl as she starts talking.
Girl four: Are you ready?
The other girls all start laughing and the camera then goes Black and the titles start
FEEDBACK FROM CLASS:
- Sineads use of sound was really effective and added to the eery feel that we are trying to portray in our opening.
- The setting of the field was very popular in the feedback, people thought it would connote loneliness and vulnerability.
- The idea of the cauldron was liked but could be seen as too 'obvious' and brought down the creepy tones of the opening.
- Ripping up of rags and dolls was said to be symbolic, perhaps because this is what will happen to the main character further in the film.
- The beginning setting of the field contrasts well with the fast pace of the rest of Sinead's script as it created strong contrast.
After receiving the feedback, we decided it a good idea that we take all of the best/most well liked parts from each of our scripts and put them together for our final piece. By doing this, we would ensure that we are creating an opening that would be liked and would be popular. There were parts of all of the possible openings that we agreed did not give the effect we wanted and so we decided to remove. We decided that we would continue to use non-diegetic sound, the setting of the field, my idea of the close ups and the symbolic ripping up of dolls/rags.
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